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[[User:ThePlaz]] needs to write a 800-1000 word essay on bullying.  The project has no due date as of yet, but will be due after spring breakThe paper and prior revisions are stored here: [[Image:Hazing Paper.doc]].
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[[User:ThePlaz|ThePlaz]] needs to write a 800-1000 word essay on bullying using a focal viewpoint.  The project was due on May 4, 2006.   
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{{grade%|97|I revised and resubmitted a copy and now got 197/200 points - her only concern is the lack of organization and that some points are repeated.  However my research is "remarkable and through."
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'''See the new [[:Image:Revised Grade Sheet and Comments.pdf|Revised Grade Sheet and Comments packet]]'''
  
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Original submission: 189/200 with 2 points off for not using actually using Opposing Viewpoints source; 1 point off for providing full URLs in MLA Works Cited; 2 points off for organization and repetitiveness; two points off for a repetitive conclusion, and 4 points off for mechanics.  '''See the [http://theplaz.com/static/Grade%20Sheet%20and%20Comments.PDF Grade Sheet and Comments]'''}}
 
{{word|Image:Hazing Paper.doc}}
 
{{word|Image:Hazing Paper.doc}}
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{{pdf|Image:Hazing Paper Revised After Grade.pdf}}
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{{Green Box|Paper Revised|I have made minor revision based off of the teacher comments while grading.}}
  
 
==Focus==
 
==Focus==
He is supose to focus in on one topic.  He has chosen '''Hazing''' as his "General topic" and possibly pick ''Freshemen Hazing'' as his "focused topic." He might expand to High School Hazing for his ''Focused topic''.
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He is supose to focus in on one topic.  He has chosen '''Hazing''' as his "General topic" and possibly pick ''Freshmen Hazing'' as his "focused topic." He might expand to High School Hazing for his ''Focused topic''.
  
:''I have decided''  I will focus on <strong>high school hazing</strong>.  This includes both freshmen, (which there was not much information on), and sports teams.  (Also for sports teams, new members are often freshmen) I can talk about how teens try to out-do one another and how hazing can esclate to being dangerous and illegal. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:18, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
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:''I have decided''  I will focus on <strong>high school hazing</strong>.  This includes both freshmen, (which there was not much information on), and sports teams.  (Also for sports teams, new members are often freshmen) I can talk about how teens try to out-do one another and how hazing can escalate to being dangerous and illegal. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:18, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
  
 
==Sources==
 
==Sources==
 
*Must have 4 articles from databases. One from SIRS, one from EBSCO Host, one from Facts.com, and one from Opposing Viewpoints.
 
*Must have 4 articles from databases. One from SIRS, one from EBSCO Host, one from Facts.com, and one from Opposing Viewpoints.
*Also he must have two of the following: book soucres, website, or interview.
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*Also he must have two of the following: book sources, website, or interview.
  
'''The soucres I am using are (or in part) here: [[Hazing Paper/Sources]]
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'''The sources I am using are (or in part) here: [[Hazing Paper/Sources]]
  
We go to the libary on 3/29/06 and 3/31/06 to research and listen to the boring database presentation.
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We go to the library on 3/29/06 and 3/31/06 to research and listen to the boring database presentation.
  
I have gotton permission to replace an EBSCO source with another SIRS source.
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I have gotten permission to replace an EBSCO source with another SIRS source.
  
 
'''Finished MLA Works Cited: [http://theplaz.com/wiki/images/archive/20060417181233%21Hazing_Paper.doc]'''
 
'''Finished MLA Works Cited: [http://theplaz.com/wiki/images/archive/20060417181233%21Hazing_Paper.doc]'''
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<nowiki>“A Culture of Violence?: Current Topics of Special Interest.” Information Plus Reference Series. Ed. Kathleen Edgar. 2004. Opposing Viewpoints Resource Center. Thompson Gale.  29 March 2006 <http://galenet.galegroup.com/servlet/OVRC?vrsn=229&slb=SU&locID=have49147&srchtp=basic&c=1&ste=18&tbst=ts_basic&tab=2&txb=hazing&docNum=X3011390107&fail=0&bConts=10>.
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Bowers, Matthew.  “Rites & Wrongs.” The Virginian Pilot. 4 Sept. 2005. SIRS Researcher via SIRS Knowledge Source.  ProQuest. 29 March 2006 <http://sks.sirs.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SPL2300-0-3494&artno=0000238315&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=N>.
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  Bushweller, Kevin.  “Brutal Rituals, Dangerous Rites.” The American School Board Journal. Aug. 2000. SIRS Researcher via SIRS Knowledge Source.  ProQuest. 29 March 2006 <http://sks.sirs.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SPL2300-0-3494&artno=0000121184&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=N>.
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“Hazing.” Issues &Controversies on File @ Facts.com. 7 Aug. 1998. Facts on File News Services. 29 March 2006 <http://www.2facts.com/ICOF/Search/i0301570.asp>.
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Hazing Defined. Stophazing.org. 10 March 2005. 4 April 2006 <http://www.stophazing.org/definition.html>.
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High School Hazing. Stophazing.org. 30 Sept. 2005. 31 March 2006 <http://www.stophazing.org/high_school_hazing/index.htm>. </nowiki>
  
 
==Shift through Info==
 
==Shift through Info==
 
In my notebook.  I might scan it in latter. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:13, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
 
In my notebook.  I might scan it in latter. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:13, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
  
==Thesis Draft==
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==Thesis==
 
'''Working Thesis:''' Although high school hazing can be harmless, it can escalate to being dangerous and illegal as teens try to out-do one another. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:16, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
 
'''Working Thesis:''' Although high school hazing can be harmless, it can escalate to being dangerous and illegal as teens try to out-do one another. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 14:16, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
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:'''Morphed to:''' Although high school hazing starts out and seems harmless, it can quickly escalate to being dangerous and illegal. --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 17:58, 30 April 2006 (EDT)
  
 
==Outline Draft==
 
==Outline Draft==
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##Less sever- doesn’t deserve punishment – (see source 4)
 
##Less sever- doesn’t deserve punishment – (see source 4)
  
==Paper==
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==Final Paper==
Not written yet.  Now, if it would just magically appear.... Darn! --[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 15:24, 17 April 2006 (EDT)
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'''FINAL!'''--[[User:ThePlaz|Plaz]] 17:40, 1 May 2006 (EDT)
===First Draft===
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{{PDF|Image:Hazing Paper Revised After Grade.pdf}}
Hazing can be a very dangerous form of bullying.  About 70 people have been killed by hazing in the last 20 years (Facts.com 2). “’Hazing’ refers to any activity expected of someone joining a group … that humiliates, degrades or risks emotional and/or physical harm, regardless of the person's willingness to participate” (Hazing Defined 1).  Hazing is dangerous because alcohol is often involved; in fact, alcohol is a factor in 98% of hazing deaths (Facts.com 6).?drop? Most hazing deaths occur because the act goes too far; the hazers get carried away.  Their intention is to have a team building activity or make sure members are up to snuff (Facts.com 2).  However, this is not what really happens.  The acts often cross the line, and the victims do not complain, because they want to join the group (Facts.com 2).  Teens often want to out do one another; each year, teens do something more dangerous then what happened to them (Bowers 1; Bushweller 3).  Not only can these acts dangerous, but they are an “abuse of power and [a] violation of human dignity” (High School Hazing). If teens can be educated that this hurtful and inhumane act of bullying is forbidden in high school, then they will know that it not acceptable in college, where it becomes the most dangerous. That is why I ? believe that, although high school hazing can be harmless, it can escalate to being dangerous and illegal as teens try to out-do one another. (thesis)
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Hazing is a very dangerous form of bullying.  About 70 people have been killed by hazing in the last 20 years (Facts.com 2). "<nowiki>’</nowiki>Hazing<nowiki>’</nowiki> refers to any activity expected of someone joining a group … that humiliates, degrades or risks emotional and/or physical harm, regardless of the person<nowiki>’</nowiki>s willingness to participate" (<u>Hazing Defined</u> 1).  Most hazing deaths occur because the act goes too far; the hazers get carried away.  Their intention is to have a team building activity or make sure members are up to snuff (Facts.com 2).  However, this is not what really happens.  The acts often cross the line, and the victims do not complain because they want to join the group (Facts.com 2).  Teens often want to outdo one another; each year, teens do something more dangerous than what happened to them while they were the victims (Bowers 1; Bushweller 3).  Not only can these acts be dangerous, but they are also an "abuse of power and <nowiki>[</nowiki>a<nowiki>]</nowiki> violation of human dignity" (<u>High School Hazing</u>). If teens can be educated that this hurtful and inhumane act of bullying is forbidden in high school, then they will know that it is not acceptable in college, where hazing becomes the most dangerous.
  
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Although high school hazing starts out and seems harmless, it can quickly escalate to being harmful, dangerous, and illegal.  However, in most cases, the victim will still take part because they want to join the group.  Take for instance, Casey Culpepper.  She wanted to join the volleyball team her first year in high school.  All through the summer, the threat of the "initiation" haunted her.  One day she and her friends were attacked by seniors after class and smeared with concoctions that included canned dog food, eggs, ketchup, mustard, horse manure and pet feces. They were then hosed off so hard that it hurt (Bowers 1).  Other students at Western Branch High School were attacked with chemicals and waste from portable toilets.  These students must now take powerful HIV drugs and undergo frequent screenings for AIDS (Bowers 1).  Their lives will never be the same after this harmful experience.  Nick Haben was 18 when he was forced to consume large amounts of hard liquor and beer, jump over bonfires, and swim in a creek.  He was just trying to join the college lacrosse team at Western Illinois University.  He later passed out into a coma and died that night in his dorm.  No one bothered to bring him to a hospital and save his life (Bushweller 2).
  
Hazing can very quickly turn from a harmless prank into a dangerous situationIn most cases, the victim will still take part in order to join the groupTake for instance, Casey CulpepperShe wanted to join the volleyball her first year in high schoolAll through the summer, the threat of the "initiation" haunted herOne day she and her friends were snatched by seniors after class, and smeared with concoctions that included canned dog food, eggs, ketchup, mustard, horse manure and pet feces. Then, they were hosed off so hard that it hurt (Bowers 1).  ?Replace with nick bottom of p2, source THREE? Other students at Western Branch High School were attacked with chemicals and waste from portable toiletsThese students must now take powerful HIV drugs and undergo frequent screenings (Bowers 1)Their life will never be the same after this harmful experience.
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Unfortunately, the problem only gets worse after high schoolFraternities and sororities, tight social clubs in college based off the Greek system, are notorious for their dangerous hazing practicesThe movie "Animal House," is a showcase of the problem in popular cultureHazing and physical abuse in fraternities began with class fights between freshmen and seniors in the late 19<sup>th</sup> century and was based off military initiation rituals (Facts.com 5)By the 1970<nowiki>’</nowiki>s, alcohol became a part of almost every fraternity function, including hazing (Facts.com 6). Alcohol impairs one<nowiki>’</nowiki>s ability of judgment and the ability to know when to stop a dangerous situationIn fact, according to Eileen Stevens, the president of the Committee to Halt Useless College Killings (CHUCK), alcohol is a factor in 98% of all fatal hazing incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6).  In addition, this figure does not contain the incidents that college officials classified only as alcohol-related incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6).  This is why college is when most hazing turns fatal.  However, teens in high school also drink alcohol and their judgment becomes impaired tooIf students in high school learn that hazing is unacceptable, they will say no to hazing in collegeHopefully, they will recognize that they are being put in a dangerous situation and ask the hazers to stop.  However, most victims are afraid to speak up when they are being victimized by hazing.
  
 
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Hazing victims do not speak up and ask for the hazing to stop because of peer pressure (<u>High School Hazing</u>)Victims believe that the hazing is necessary to join the group, club, team, or activity (Bushweller 2)However, peer pressure not only forces the victim to go along with the act, but also forces the hazers to continue and the coaches to overlook itAdministrators, coaches, and teachers, as well as the hazers, believe the hazing is an acceptable tradition that should be allowed to continue (<u>High School Hazing</u>).  Also, the older students are afraid to speak up and stop their friends from hazing others. They are afraid of peer pressureTeachers and coaches do not know the dangers of hazing and are unwilling to stop it (<u>High School Hazing</u>).  This must changeBut still, through peer pressure, no one speaks up about hazing – not the victims or the hazersThis allows dangerous situations to occur, both in high school and through into college.
However, the problem only gets worse after high schoolFraternities, tight social clubs in college, are notorious from their dangerous hazing practicesThe movie “Animal House,” is a showcase of the problem in popular culture.  Hazing and physical abuse in fraternities began with class fights between freshmen and seniors in the late 19th century and was based of military imitation rituals (Facts.com 5).  By 1970’s alcohol became a part of almost every fraternity function, including hazing rituals (Facts.com 6). Alcohol impairs one’s ability of judgement and the ability of know when to stop a dangerous situationIn fact, according to Eileen Stevens, the president of the Committee to Halt Useless College Killings (CHUCK), alcohol is a factor in 98% of all fatal hazing incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6)In addition, this does not contain the incidents that college officials classify only as alcohol-related incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6).  College is when most hazing turns fatalHowever, if students in high school learn that hazing is unacceptable, they will know that once they start collegeHopefully, they will recognize that they are being put in a dangerous situation and ask the hazers to stop.  However, most people are afraid to speak up when they are being victimized by hazing.
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However, the problem has gotten better.  High schools and colleges now educate students about the dangers of hazing (Facts.com 11).  Forty-four states have also passed laws against hazing (Bowers 2).  School districts are creating anti-hazing policies (Bushweller 2).  That means that hazing is no longer "being swept under the rug" in most places (Facts.com 11).  However, hazing goes on and continues to put lives at risk.
  
Hazing victims do not speak up and ask for the hazing to stop because of peer pressure (High School Hazing).  They also believe that the hazing is necessary to join the group, club, team, or activity (Bushweller 2).  Peer pressure not only forces the victim to go along with the act, but also forces the hazers to continue and the coaches to overlookAdministrators, coaches, and teachers, as well as the hazers, believe the hazing is an acceptable tradition that should be allowed to continue (High School Hazing).  They do not know the dangers of hazing and are unwilling to stop it (High School Hazing)Through peer pressure, no one speaks up about hazing – not the victims or the hazersThis allows dangerous situations to occur, both in high school and colleges.
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Teens have a tendency to want to outdo one another (Bowers 1).  They want to do something better and harsher than what was done to them when they first joined the team (Bowers 1).  This leads to an endless cycle of "hazing creep" (Bowers 1)If hazing can not be stopped, it will grow progressively worse over time. Today<nowiki>’</nowiki>s media also contributes to the problem (Bowers 1).  Teens see television shows such as "Fear Factor" and try to replicate the stunts without realizing that such stunts are closely supervised by trained professionalsIn addition, teens may observe their peers doing crazy things.  As a result of peer pressure an endless cycle of hazing creep continuesHazing will get progressively worse if it can not be stopped soon.
  
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Hazing is just wrong!  Kids should not need to go through humiliation rituals to join a club or team.  There is no need for these activities to take place.  Hazing defenders say that hazing helps build team solidarity (Facts.com 3).  "Prolonged hazing works to break down a person<nowiki>’</nowiki>s earlier group allegiances and replace them with new beliefs and loyalties" says James Ogloff, a psychology professor at Simon Fraser University in Vancouver, Canada (qtd. in Facts.com 3).  However, there are much more constructive ways to build team camaraderie.  Games that build trust are better then ones that destroy trust and cause suffering.  There are no valid excuses to why hazing should be practiced.  "A landmark 2000 study of U.S. high school hazing by Alfred University in New York found that almost half the students who joined school or youth organizations were hazed--1.5 million students a year--and more than a quarter were expected to perform potentially illegal acts" (qtd. in Bowers).  In addition other organizations besides school clubs and teams hazed.  The study also found that one quarter of youths joining church groups were hazed (Bowers 2).
  
Teens have a tendency to want to out do one another (Bowers 1)They want to do something better and harsher then what was done to them (Bowers 1)Today’s media also contributes to the problem (Bowers 1)Teens see television shows such as “Fear Factor” and try to replicate the stunts without realizing that such stunts are closely supervised by professionalsTeens see these shows and observe their peers doing such stuntsAs a result, peer pressure and the want to “one-up” their own hazing ritual creates the cycle of “hazing creep” (Bowers 1).  If hazing can not be stopped, it will constantly get worse over time.
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Hazing ruins many students<nowiki>’</nowiki> lives by not letting them pursue their hobbies and interests.  Many groups will not let a student join if they refuse to be hazedFor instance, take Jack LukicHazing ruined his lifeAt Cox High School, Jack wanted to join theater as an extracurricular activity and for something funHowever, when he joined he was forced to put on a costume and bark on command for a weekHe said, "It was just humiliating.  You walk in, and they all laugh at you."  He quit on the second day and never returned to theater ever.  Even in college with different kids, he never felt like going back.  "I kind of had a bad taste for theater" (Bowers 3).  Hazing ruined his life; because of a silly, supposedly harmless prank, he could never again pursue this hobby.  There are many other stories like Jack<nowiki>’</nowiki>s out there, where kids are not allowed to pursue their hobbies and interests.  Hazing restricts their freedom to live their lives how they want, and to join the club or sport that they want to be a part of.
  
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Most students who are hazed, do not complain.  "Some <nowiki>[</nowiki>students<nowiki>]</nowiki> say <nowiki>’</nowiki>I had a great time.<nowiki>’</nowiki> Others say <nowiki>’</nowiki>I had a miserable time.<nowiki>’</nowiki> And others see it as a necessary evil" (qtd. in Bushweller 2).  This is what makes hazing a difficult subject, the issue of consent.  "Psychologists say <nowiki>[</nowiki>that<nowiki>]</nowiki> most students endure hazing and never tell anyone outside the group because of an overwhelming need to belong" (qtd. in Bushweller 2).  One student even said, "I enjoyed it. It was fun. It<nowiki>’</nowiki>s a bonding experience for us."
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However, Art Taylor, a psychologist at the Center for the Study of Sport in Society at Northeastern University in Massachusetts, says, "That<nowiki>’</nowiki>s bull.  Humiliating hazing rituals are more likely to tear people apart, destroy trust, and cause feelings of hatred.  <nowiki>[</nowiki>Also, B<nowiki>]</nowiki>oys and men who enjoy hazing others in brutal or humiliating ways are more likely to become abusive husbands or fathers" (qtd. in Bushweller 2).  Even though some victims claim they enjoy hazing, it is still harmful and inhumane to some.  To others, well they are most likely bluffing that they enjoyed being hazed.  These students just want to fit in.  This is a good example of peer pressure at work.
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Hazing, although it appears harmless, can quickly become harmful and dangerous.  About 70 people have been killed by hazing in the last 20 years (Facts.com 2).  Most of these deaths occurred in college, and as a result of alcohol.  However, hazing can still be dangerous in high school.  Not only can hazing cause physical harm, it can also cause psychological damage.  Hazing is caused by a need to belong and to fit in with one<nowiki>’</nowiki>s peers.  Hazing is not combated because it is believed to be an innocent act by uneducated students, coaches, and administrators.  Victims do not speak up because of their willingness to join the team or group.  In addition, hazing is just wrong.  It is an abuse of human dignity.  There are better ways to build team solidarity and trust, then to destroy it under the guise of building such trust.  Hazing can and has ruined people<nowiki>’</nowiki>s lives and the freedom to pursue the hobbies, sports, and activities that they want to.  It is a destructive force, not a constructive force.  Hazing is not enjoyed by most victims, even though many say its fun.  Every way you look at it, hazing is just appalling and unnecessary.
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==Old Revisions==
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===First Draft===
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/First Draft]]'''
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===Second Draft===
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{{rev-word|http://wiki.theplaz.com/w/images/archive/20060430191811%21Hazing_Paper.doc}}
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/Second Draft]]'''
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===Third Draft (After Peer Revisions 1)===
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/Third Draft]]'''
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===Fourth Draft===
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/Fourth Draft]]'''
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===Fifth Draft===
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/Fifth Draft]]'''
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===Final Submitted Draft===
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'''See [[Hazing Paper/Final Draft]]'''
  
Hazing is just wrong!  People should not need to go through humiliation rituals to join a club or team.  
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==Peer Revisions Round 1==
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(File updates are cumulative off second draft to make third draft)
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===Jeff===
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===Kristen===
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===Ms. Kaiser===
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==Scanned Packet/Graded==
*need to write 3rd topic and closing
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{{pdf|File:9th Grade English Hazing Paper Graded.pdf}}
**List hazing stats (three)
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**Counterpoint: people want it (and give their consent)
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**Counter points: builds teamword (actually destroys it and better, nondescrutive ways to build)
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**Ruined theater person’s life
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**Hazing creep emphasize more
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==Categories==
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{{Personal Philosophies}}
 
[[Category:English 9]]
 
[[Category:English 9]]
 
[[Category:Research Paper]]
 
[[Category:Research Paper]]

Latest revision as of 03:53, 5 February 2012

ThePlaz needs to write a 800-1000 word essay on bullying using a focal viewpoint. The project was due on May 4, 2006.

Grade:97%

I revised and resubmitted a copy and now got 197/200 points - her only concern is the lack of organization and that some points are repeated. However my research is "remarkable and through." See the new Revised Grade Sheet and Comments packet

Original submission: 189/200 with 2 points off for not using actually using Opposing Viewpoints source; 1 point off for providing full URLs in MLA Works Cited; 2 points off for organization and repetitiveness; two points off for a repetitive conclusion, and 4 points off for mechanics. See the Grade Sheet and Comments

Word.PNGA Microsoft Word version of this work is available here: Image:Hazing Paper.doc

Pdf.jpgA PDF version of this work is available here: Image:Hazing Paper Revised After Grade.pdf

Paper Revised

I have made minor revision based off of the teacher comments while grading.


Focus

He is supose to focus in on one topic. He has chosen Hazing as his "General topic" and possibly pick Freshmen Hazing as his "focused topic." He might expand to High School Hazing for his Focused topic.

I have decided I will focus on high school hazing. This includes both freshmen, (which there was not much information on), and sports teams. (Also for sports teams, new members are often freshmen) I can talk about how teens try to out-do one another and how hazing can escalate to being dangerous and illegal. --Plaz 14:18, 17 April 2006 (EDT)

Sources

  • Must have 4 articles from databases. One from SIRS, one from EBSCO Host, one from Facts.com, and one from Opposing Viewpoints.
  • Also he must have two of the following: book sources, website, or interview.

The sources I am using are (or in part) here: Hazing Paper/Sources

We go to the library on 3/29/06 and 3/31/06 to research and listen to the boring database presentation.

I have gotten permission to replace an EBSCO source with another SIRS source.

Finished MLA Works Cited: [1]

Word.PNGA Microsoft Word version of this revision is available here


“A Culture of Violence?: Current Topics of Special Interest.” Information Plus Reference Series. Ed. Kathleen Edgar. 2004. Opposing Viewpoints Resource Center. Thompson Gale. 29 March 2006 <http://galenet.galegroup.com/servlet/OVRC?vrsn=229&slb=SU&locID=have49147&srchtp=basic&c=1&ste=18&tbst=ts_basic&tab=2&txb=hazing&docNum=X3011390107&fail=0&bConts=10>. Bowers, Matthew. “Rites & Wrongs.” The Virginian Pilot. 4 Sept. 2005. SIRS Researcher via SIRS Knowledge Source. ProQuest. 29 March 2006 <http://sks.sirs.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SPL2300-0-3494&artno=0000238315&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=N>. Bushweller, Kevin. “Brutal Rituals, Dangerous Rites.” The American School Board Journal. Aug. 2000. SIRS Researcher via SIRS Knowledge Source. ProQuest. 29 March 2006 <http://sks.sirs.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SPL2300-0-3494&artno=0000121184&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=N>. “Hazing.” Issues &Controversies on File @ Facts.com. 7 Aug. 1998. Facts on File News Services. 29 March 2006 <http://www.2facts.com/ICOF/Search/i0301570.asp>. Hazing Defined. Stophazing.org. 10 March 2005. 4 April 2006 <http://www.stophazing.org/definition.html>. High School Hazing. Stophazing.org. 30 Sept. 2005. 31 March 2006 <http://www.stophazing.org/high_school_hazing/index.htm>.

Shift through Info

In my notebook. I might scan it in latter. --Plaz 14:13, 17 April 2006 (EDT)

Thesis

Working Thesis: Although high school hazing can be harmless, it can escalate to being dangerous and illegal as teens try to out-do one another. --Plaz 14:16, 17 April 2006 (EDT)

Morphed to: Although high school hazing starts out and seems harmless, it can quickly escalate to being dangerous and illegal. --Plaz 17:58, 30 April 2006 (EDT)

Outline Draft

  1. Working Thesis: Although high school hazing can be harmless, it can escalate to being dangerous and illegal as teens try to out-do one another.
  2. Constant Notice: “Hazing Creep” – keeps getting worse and worse as teens try to out-do one another
  3. Topic One: Can turn illegal and dangerous
    1. Mention hs case where it was dangerous – and person’s life affected
    2. In college - lots of people die from it
      1. (98% of hazing death are alcohol related)
      2. mention a bit about frats
      3. if people know it is wrong in hs – this can be prevented
  4. Two: It is done because students feel they need to belong
    1. Peer pressure
    2. Both hazer (Source 8) and the victim (7) feel peer pressure
    3. Teens need to belong (pp)
    4. Under reported because coaches did it (as hs students) and they go along with it
      1. Hazers also did it a few years ago (and try to best that)
    5. New people want to join teem – might not know it’s wrong
    6. Coaches and hazers don’t know danger (of escalation)
  5. Three: It’s just wrong!
    1. People shouldn’t suffer for joining a team
      1. Eight-> “abuse of power and human dignity”
    2. Some people just don’t want to do it
      1. Give theater boy example
        1. ruined his life! (sort-of)
    3. Counterpoint: Makes groups stronger
      1. Better ways to “build teamwork”
      2. ?give example of how people are doing that?
  6. Other points (that I should work in somehow - ?or not?):
    1. Hazing victims give their consent (?into point three?)
    2. Less sever- doesn’t deserve punishment – (see source 4)

Final Paper

FINAL!--Plaz 17:40, 1 May 2006 (EDT)

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Hazing is a very dangerous form of bullying. About 70 people have been killed by hazing in the last 20 years (Facts.com 2). "’Hazing’ refers to any activity expected of someone joining a group … that humiliates, degrades or risks emotional and/or physical harm, regardless of the person’s willingness to participate" (Hazing Defined 1). Most hazing deaths occur because the act goes too far; the hazers get carried away. Their intention is to have a team building activity or make sure members are up to snuff (Facts.com 2). However, this is not what really happens. The acts often cross the line, and the victims do not complain because they want to join the group (Facts.com 2). Teens often want to outdo one another; each year, teens do something more dangerous than what happened to them while they were the victims (Bowers 1; Bushweller 3). Not only can these acts be dangerous, but they are also an "abuse of power and [a] violation of human dignity" (High School Hazing). If teens can be educated that this hurtful and inhumane act of bullying is forbidden in high school, then they will know that it is not acceptable in college, where hazing becomes the most dangerous.

Although high school hazing starts out and seems harmless, it can quickly escalate to being harmful, dangerous, and illegal. However, in most cases, the victim will still take part because they want to join the group. Take for instance, Casey Culpepper. She wanted to join the volleyball team her first year in high school. All through the summer, the threat of the "initiation" haunted her. One day she and her friends were attacked by seniors after class and smeared with concoctions that included canned dog food, eggs, ketchup, mustard, horse manure and pet feces. They were then hosed off so hard that it hurt (Bowers 1). Other students at Western Branch High School were attacked with chemicals and waste from portable toilets. These students must now take powerful HIV drugs and undergo frequent screenings for AIDS (Bowers 1). Their lives will never be the same after this harmful experience. Nick Haben was 18 when he was forced to consume large amounts of hard liquor and beer, jump over bonfires, and swim in a creek. He was just trying to join the college lacrosse team at Western Illinois University. He later passed out into a coma and died that night in his dorm. No one bothered to bring him to a hospital and save his life (Bushweller 2).

Unfortunately, the problem only gets worse after high school. Fraternities and sororities, tight social clubs in college based off the Greek system, are notorious for their dangerous hazing practices. The movie "Animal House," is a showcase of the problem in popular culture. Hazing and physical abuse in fraternities began with class fights between freshmen and seniors in the late 19th century and was based off military initiation rituals (Facts.com 5). By the 1970’s, alcohol became a part of almost every fraternity function, including hazing (Facts.com 6). Alcohol impairs one’s ability of judgment and the ability to know when to stop a dangerous situation. In fact, according to Eileen Stevens, the president of the Committee to Halt Useless College Killings (CHUCK), alcohol is a factor in 98% of all fatal hazing incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6). In addition, this figure does not contain the incidents that college officials classified only as alcohol-related incidents (qtd. in Facts.com 6). This is why college is when most hazing turns fatal. However, teens in high school also drink alcohol and their judgment becomes impaired too. If students in high school learn that hazing is unacceptable, they will say no to hazing in college. Hopefully, they will recognize that they are being put in a dangerous situation and ask the hazers to stop. However, most victims are afraid to speak up when they are being victimized by hazing.

Hazing victims do not speak up and ask for the hazing to stop because of peer pressure (High School Hazing). Victims believe that the hazing is necessary to join the group, club, team, or activity (Bushweller 2). However, peer pressure not only forces the victim to go along with the act, but also forces the hazers to continue and the coaches to overlook it. Administrators, coaches, and teachers, as well as the hazers, believe the hazing is an acceptable tradition that should be allowed to continue (High School Hazing). Also, the older students are afraid to speak up and stop their friends from hazing others. They are afraid of peer pressure. Teachers and coaches do not know the dangers of hazing and are unwilling to stop it (High School Hazing). This must change. But still, through peer pressure, no one speaks up about hazing – not the victims or the hazers. This allows dangerous situations to occur, both in high school and through into college.

However, the problem has gotten better. High schools and colleges now educate students about the dangers of hazing (Facts.com 11). Forty-four states have also passed laws against hazing (Bowers 2). School districts are creating anti-hazing policies (Bushweller 2). That means that hazing is no longer "being swept under the rug" in most places (Facts.com 11). However, hazing goes on and continues to put lives at risk.

Teens have a tendency to want to outdo one another (Bowers 1). They want to do something better and harsher than what was done to them when they first joined the team (Bowers 1). This leads to an endless cycle of "hazing creep" (Bowers 1). If hazing can not be stopped, it will grow progressively worse over time. Today’s media also contributes to the problem (Bowers 1). Teens see television shows such as "Fear Factor" and try to replicate the stunts without realizing that such stunts are closely supervised by trained professionals. In addition, teens may observe their peers doing crazy things. As a result of peer pressure an endless cycle of hazing creep continues. Hazing will get progressively worse if it can not be stopped soon.

Hazing is just wrong! Kids should not need to go through humiliation rituals to join a club or team. There is no need for these activities to take place. Hazing defenders say that hazing helps build team solidarity (Facts.com 3). "Prolonged hazing works to break down a person’s earlier group allegiances and replace them with new beliefs and loyalties" says James Ogloff, a psychology professor at Simon Fraser University in Vancouver, Canada (qtd. in Facts.com 3). However, there are much more constructive ways to build team camaraderie. Games that build trust are better then ones that destroy trust and cause suffering. There are no valid excuses to why hazing should be practiced. "A landmark 2000 study of U.S. high school hazing by Alfred University in New York found that almost half the students who joined school or youth organizations were hazed--1.5 million students a year--and more than a quarter were expected to perform potentially illegal acts" (qtd. in Bowers). In addition other organizations besides school clubs and teams hazed. The study also found that one quarter of youths joining church groups were hazed (Bowers 2).

Hazing ruins many students’ lives by not letting them pursue their hobbies and interests. Many groups will not let a student join if they refuse to be hazed. For instance, take Jack Lukic. Hazing ruined his life. At Cox High School, Jack wanted to join theater as an extracurricular activity and for something fun. However, when he joined he was forced to put on a costume and bark on command for a week. He said, "It was just humiliating. You walk in, and they all laugh at you." He quit on the second day and never returned to theater ever. Even in college with different kids, he never felt like going back. "I kind of had a bad taste for theater" (Bowers 3). Hazing ruined his life; because of a silly, supposedly harmless prank, he could never again pursue this hobby. There are many other stories like Jack’s out there, where kids are not allowed to pursue their hobbies and interests. Hazing restricts their freedom to live their lives how they want, and to join the club or sport that they want to be a part of.

Most students who are hazed, do not complain. "Some [students] say ’I had a great time.’ Others say ’I had a miserable time.’ And others see it as a necessary evil" (qtd. in Bushweller 2). This is what makes hazing a difficult subject, the issue of consent. "Psychologists say [that] most students endure hazing and never tell anyone outside the group because of an overwhelming need to belong" (qtd. in Bushweller 2). One student even said, "I enjoyed it. It was fun. It’s a bonding experience for us."

However, Art Taylor, a psychologist at the Center for the Study of Sport in Society at Northeastern University in Massachusetts, says, "That’s bull. Humiliating hazing rituals are more likely to tear people apart, destroy trust, and cause feelings of hatred. [Also, B]oys and men who enjoy hazing others in brutal or humiliating ways are more likely to become abusive husbands or fathers" (qtd. in Bushweller 2). Even though some victims claim they enjoy hazing, it is still harmful and inhumane to some. To others, well they are most likely bluffing that they enjoyed being hazed. These students just want to fit in. This is a good example of peer pressure at work.

Hazing, although it appears harmless, can quickly become harmful and dangerous. About 70 people have been killed by hazing in the last 20 years (Facts.com 2). Most of these deaths occurred in college, and as a result of alcohol. However, hazing can still be dangerous in high school. Not only can hazing cause physical harm, it can also cause psychological damage. Hazing is caused by a need to belong and to fit in with one’s peers. Hazing is not combated because it is believed to be an innocent act by uneducated students, coaches, and administrators. Victims do not speak up because of their willingness to join the team or group. In addition, hazing is just wrong. It is an abuse of human dignity. There are better ways to build team solidarity and trust, then to destroy it under the guise of building such trust. Hazing can and has ruined people’s lives and the freedom to pursue the hobbies, sports, and activities that they want to. It is a destructive force, not a constructive force. Hazing is not enjoyed by most victims, even though many say its fun. Every way you look at it, hazing is just appalling and unnecessary.

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